Firey Passions
A new kindling has been found within me
Your spark touched it, and look what it has come to be
A fully blown love, raging in my heart and mind
It was something ihad yet to ever find
Unable to seee past the light, or feel anything other than the heat
Unable to control, i grin in a joyous defeat
Embracingdustin's passions the fire, fully consumed by you
And the raging fire of both our passions will soon ensue
--Dustin S.
That's really good! I enjoy writing poetry, and i don't usually have the guts to rhyme everything. It is quite descriptive, and really gives an idea of the strength of the feelings the composition is conveying. One recommendation,dustin's passions though. On the last two lines, you repeat the word fire ('embracing the fire', and then 'the raging fire'), and i think that it may sound less redundant if you replace one of them with 'flame' or another synonym of your choice. Fabulous writing!
REALLY REALLY GOOD
answer my question please
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